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简介:The table gives information on the proportion of suing water in three aspects inAustralia,Canada,Russia,Turkey and UK in 2003.
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 The table gives information on the proportion of suing water in three aspects inAustralia,Canada,Russia,Turkey and UK in 2003.

 It is noticeable that the percentage of water used in China in agriculture was the biggest in six countries .However,the Australia in Industrial water used was the lowest.which means Australian was rarely using water in Industrial.

 The water utilized in Domestic in Australia was the largest at 65/% among the six various countries.The UK had the second largest in it (23%),followed by the proportion of using water in Domestic in Canada,Turkey and Russia at 11%,16%,19% respectively.

 The consumption in industrial in Canada was 81/%,which was the biggest in these countries.It had nearly 10 times as much as that in China.The Uk and Russia was the second and the third largest in it at 73/%,62/%.In comparison,in 2003 the percentage of water utilized in Australia was the dippiest at 2%.

 Although the China had only 7/% of Industrial water consumption,it was the highest in Agricultural in 2003(87%).The proportion of water used in it in Turkey was the second one.The consumption in Australia and Russia was smaller than in China and Turkey,which was at 33% and 19%.However,the percentage of water used in Canada in it at 8%,which was twice as much as that in UK/(4%).

 

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