雅思英语类别: 如下为同学雅思原文: There is a diagram that marked with numbers and gave some clear informations about every step .Through a series of produce pictures tell us how to make the chocolate. Making chocolate begins with ripe red pods from the cocoa tree in which grown in South America,Africa and Indonesia.Next,when pod harvested,white cocoa beans harvested by farmers and comes to the produce of beans fermented. Then the beans are putted in large sacks and transported by train or lorry. Then cocoa beans taken to factory and roasted in the roast machine.Before the whole process comes to the end, beans crushed in the crusher so that out shell can removed.At last ,inner part pressed and liquid chocolate produced .Then liquid chocolate became cooler in the air and got the final product-chocolate. Overall,the picture shown us the ten steps of made chocolate from raw materials to final chocolate productions. 如下为外教修改后的作文: 如下为下载链接(包含了同学原片以及修改后的,请下载后电脑查看,手机无法看到完整版): |