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I am a loyalty consumer who read your magazine regularly.

2019-10-24 11:43| 发布者: admin| 查看: 629| 评论: 0

简介:I am a loyalty consumer who read your magazine regularly. Your magazine has given my new ideas about my vacations, and I will choose the destinations of holiday based on your articles. But the last m ...
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Dear Mr/Madam:

 I am a loyalty consumer who read your magazine regularly. Your magazine has given my new ideas about my vacations, and  I will choose the destinations of holiday based on your articles. But the last magazine published some wrong information about my hometown and I hope you know what the wrong information are.

 Firstly,the Sunday market of your article mentioned was moved to a new address which is located far away from the old one. Thus, the important of correcting information for the people who hope to visit it is the necessary. Avoiding them to waste time and feel confusion with article imformation.

 Secondly,the open time of Sunday market changed from 11am to 14pm.  It  means that there is no any restaurant if people prefer to have a meal. However, the visitors can find some snack in the east of market area.

 The suggestion is that the magazine should correct these information through post a new article which focus on the traditional manufactory products and give the currently information for readers.

 Your sincerely.

 Maggie

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