What effects does it have on society？

In many countries today，people in big cities prefer to live alone or in small family units rather than a large ，extended family group.In your opinion ，what are the cause？ What effects does it have on society？

 It is seem that numerous young adults are fond of renting an apartment and live alone rather than sharing the same house with their parents.There are loads of factors lead to this consequences，besides in this essay I will  discuss the influences.

 There are different kinds of reasons .The foremost reason is the  young people face enormous completion and stress at the workplace .So after finishing them works，perhaps they are into a quite and separate space，maybe they  can have a good rest and relax in this way.For example， my sister is live far away from our family，mainly because she doesn't had enough time to accompany us and she can wanton vent her bad mood and temper .Additionally， with the development of society ，our methods of transportations are various，so our lifestyles has been changed，city has more and more roads and railways，and the people's way of life has become mobile and flexible ，consequently they are free to choose where they live instead of staying in the same place，which is a common modern phenomenon at present.It also have some effects.It is obvious that are increasing the sense of isolation of people.Living alone may donot have a person who you can chat and pour out，but sometime we indeed need that person.Everytime when I chew the fats with my friends ， all my sadness and disappointments disappeared.All in all it reduce an inidivial‘s general satisfaction with life.What is more ，it will contribute to some risks for society.That we cannot take better care of our parents，if some accidents and events occur suddenly ，we cannot get to them at the first time.

 To sum up ，nowadays citizens are prefer to live far away from them families，and it bringing a few negative impacts .

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