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eople have different views

2019-10-29 11:41| 发布者: admin| 查看: 704| 评论: 0

简介:雅思英语类别: 雅思口语一对一陪练,托福口语,日常英语口语,商务英语口语,以及幼儿英语口语。 同时本公司也承接雅思口语陪练,留学服务,雅思作文批改精批等业务。如下为同学雅思原文:People have different vi ...
雅思英语类别:
    雅思口语一对一陪练,托福口语,日常英语口语,商务英语口语,以及幼儿英语口语。
    同时本公司也承接雅思口语陪练,留学服务,雅思作文批改精批等业务。

如下为同学雅思原文:

 People have different views about how to continue to live in a place with a climate change.Although it is resonable for people to prevent this bad change.I believe that there are other way we can live there.

 Admittedly, stoping this change produce determinetal influence on people's lives. In this way, governments should have many advanced technology, but the costs of the money in there, which make people cannot enjoy more social welfare. Moreover, we must significantly reduce the use of private cars and airplanes. Close most of the factories and stop people to cut down trees. If we do it, our normal life have to sacrifice.

 However, I would argue that rather than prevent it , we are better to find another way to live in the there. First of all, people do not need to accept a lot of changes which they do not like. For example, due to the greenhouse effect, the global temperature is getting higher and higher, especially in the summer. In this case, we can often go to the water park. It not only made us feel cool but also exercise our body. Furthermore, when necessary we can make adjustment about our work times. Such flexible changes can let us adopt these huge changes faster and better.

 In conclusion, stop this climate change by all ways is acceptable but I believe that it is more describe for people find another means to live with it.

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