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What is your suggestion of Smart City development?

2019-11-7 11:37| 发布者: admin| 查看: 1191| 评论: 0

简介:In recent decade, many countries are developing ‘Smart City’. The concept of ‘Smart City’ is using technology to solve livelihood issue and create a better society for citizens. In Hong Kong, ther ...
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What is your suggestion of Smart City development?

 In recent decade, many countries are developing ‘Smart City’. The concept of ‘Smart City’ is using technology to solve livelihood issue and create a better society for citizens. In Hong Kong, there are numerous of issues needed to be solved. This essay is recommending some solutions in different circumstances.

 First of all, implementing innovative technology to ease the transportation crisis will be beneficial to public. In this city, traffic jam is excessively common especially during the peak hours. Lack of real-time information of the roads provokes the traffic. Therefore, setting up cameras on different roads to monitor the real-time situation helps the drivers deciding the route and avoid driving into the busy routes. A smartphone application will be needed for sending messages to drivers who subscribe the news alerts. Drivers can understand the situation more through the cameras and news alerts. Consequently, it eases the traffic. Moreover, redesigning the roads by 3D animation could reflect the realistic condition more. There are many bottlenecks on the roads that lead to traffic jam. As long as the road design is user-friendly enough, it will also ease the traffic.

 Secondly, using more online services is protecting the environment more. In Hong Kong, cash and credit card are the most popular payments. Cash generates a lot of paper usage every year. Especially during the Chinese New Year, people love to use brand new bank notes for Red Pockets. Meanwhile, credit cards seem more environmental friendly. However, each payment renders at least one receipt note to customers. E-payment such as Alipay by Alibaba, Wechat Pay by Tencent and PayMe by HSBC are more suitable in terms of environmental friendly. Although the online security is concerned by the public, it saves tons of paper usage. As long as the privacy issue improves, more citizens will be keen on using e-payment more to save the environment. Besides, avoiding letter and implement more e-mail usage as well as reducing paper usage.

 Thirdly, immediate reservation could help the public save more time. Hong Kong people love dining out frequently but they always spend lots of time for queueing up. Reservation application could solve this problem. Customers reserve the table by application and consequential save the waiting time that they supposed to line up. This solution could spur the consuming as well because of sparing more time for public. It could also apply onto parking. Drivers reverse the parking bay earlier to save the time of looking for parking bays.

 To conclude, implementing innovative technology to ease the transportation crisis will be beneficial to public. Moreover, using more online services is protecting the environment more. Furthermore, immediate reservation could help the public save more time.

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