WRITING TASK 1

雅思英语类别：

    雅思口语一对一陪练，托福口语，日常英语口语，商务英语口语，以及幼儿英语口语。
    同时本公司也承接雅思口语陪练，留学服务，雅思作文批改精批等业务。

如下为同学雅思原文:

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. 

Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter

l describe what you enjoyed about the course

l say how much cooking you've done since the course

l suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

Write at least 150 words

You do NOT need to write any addresses

Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

 Dear Sir or Madam,I am writing this letter to let you know how much I enjoyed cookery course that I did last week in your school. It was a short cookery course is teaching us to make a “ring” cake. Eventually, I did a good job and gained much fun with your course.

 Litter do I into account I can make a cake before your course. However, after I finished your course last week, I already made five cakes for my relatives and friends during this week. All of them gave me an excellent taste about my cake. When I heard these feedbacks, I felt more successful with my baking skills.

 There is a suggestion for your cookery course. Well know is that more and more Chinese people recently live here. Thus, it is through Chinese recipe that is offered by your school I do believe can increase a numbers of customer.

 Thank you for reading my feedback.

 Maggie

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