Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility

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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, most of the countries are intending to accomplish the educational equality. Through examination, the education institutions can offer a place to the students who get good grades, and it seems every pupil have same opportunity to study for / do a degree. In my view, I partly disagree that the two parties are facing same difficulty to having a higher-education.

Firstly, it is commonly thought that poor students are facing more stress to get into a university. It is because of their less well-off family environment. Apparently, the poor parents are hard to support and fulfil the education needs. For examples, costly tutor fees, no time for home schooling. Besides, the parents who come from low society level mostly are having lower education level, which may lead the difficulties of helping their children to solve the studying problems. The poor learning support and environment may eventually cause the poor results in the public examination which make the failure of getting into the university.

However, to eliminate the educational inequality, the government has adapted various financial policies to improve the learning environment for the students in needed. The policies like government grants and funding are aimed to give the poor pupils more motivation and support. Money can help them to afford expensive tutor fees and to buy better learning materials. Financial supports can effectively reduce the inequal resource allocation. If every student were having same amount of resources and helps, the opportunity of education may become equal. By obtaining the government supports, we can say that all the students from different backgrounds are having same ability to prepare their exams, therefore, they are having same changes to obtain higher-education.

In conclusion, I personally think that the current education system is more favourable for the riches. But the government policies properly shorten the gaps between the poor and the rich.

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