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These maps illustrate an island about some buildings

2020-1-12 16:13| 发布者: admin| 查看: 1063| 评论: 0

简介:These maps illustrate an island about some buildings of travelling facilities from the past to the later.

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These maps illustrate an island about some buildings of travelling facilities from the past to the later. 

According to the first graph which provides an overview of the original island that surrounded by the sea. There is only some trees in it with a beach in the west. The whole length of the place is about 250 miters.

As can be seen in the second picture, it is some houses in the middle of the island with the footpath. To its west, the reception is connected to a restaurant in the north and a pier in the south by the vehicle track. In the left of this area, we can see another live region consist of six accommodations. Besides, people can swimming outside of the beach or sailing below the pier. 

In conclusion, comparing this two maps, we can found great changes in it from before. This place become more suitable for visitors to travel because of its amazing facilities.

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