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如下为同学雅思原文： Some
people believe that it is good to share as much Information as possible in
scientific research, Business and the academic world. Others believe that some
Information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.
Discuss
both these views and give your opinion.
In the
following twenty years after the turn of millennium, when the desire for
information abounds in every respect of our society especially in scientific
research, Business and the academic world. Some people suppose that sharing is a
quite good thing, however, others have the opposite idea. My opinion is that,
to some extent ,share or unwilling to share are both acceptable, the decision
would be maked after thorough consideration.
Our is a
highly complex society which, in order to highly develop , needs people with
various professions to share their information and help a vast majority of
people to maintain relatively fresh information even save for their lives. For
instance, the news that some diseases have been cured can give patients hope.
If the information were be unlocked, more and more individuals could still
stand for living. Besides that, some information of extremely weather should be
shared as soon as possible, we can using diversity media to express the news,
such as TV, broadcast, cellphone applications,newspaper,etc.,which would also
save lots of lives.
When we
look at some kinds of information, however, the value and safety are
significant to be considered before people sharing them. People who devoted a
great deal of their life’s time and energy to some kind of research , their
achievement worth everyone respected them through money or other payments. Safety
is actually what people also take consideration for. For example , an information of rare precious
plant or animal should not be open to the public, which may avoid to result in
an extinct species.
As far as
I’m consider, whether to closure or disclosure information is
reasonable and should be decided according to case-by-case basis. 如下为外教修改后的作文：
 
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