Advertising can influence the way people thin

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Advertising can influence the way people think, so it has negative effects. Do you agree or disagree?

 Nowadays ,people can see advertisements anywhere in the real life or website ,as result it can subtly influence people in many ways. Some people believe those has negative effects ,and I strongly argue with this view.

 Advertisements accompany with such point of views which can influence customers’ thought in order to increase sales. Such values may not benefit for customers to think independently. For example ,many international luxury brands always try to connect their goods with the video or pictures of better life and happiness to push more consumption. As well as many cars advertisements always show the expensive cars manes successful career which can push people to buy those .Therefore,advertisements always try to simulate economy and smit communizing right value ,leading customers can not make rational thinking and decisions.

 Advertisements also include many common bias ,so it will strong the communication of bias. People can see it anywhere so that eliminating those bias become hard. Many clothing company like to invite thin models to take advertisements which shows beauty girls should like this. It can not help people to find multi-beauty and some girls may try to loss weight via starvation. And in some household produces advertisements ,such housework had been done by women and can not find man in the video which strong the stereotype in gender. Hence ,it influence people’s thinking and make negative impact in people’life and education for children. 

 In conclusion , I believe that advertisements are closely related to people’s life ,while those totally make negative influence on people’s thinking. 

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