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The diagrams show GRANGE PARK

2019-8-24 15:31| 发布者: admin| 查看: 2206| 评论: 0

简介:The diagrams show GRANGE PARK at two different stages in its development: 1920 and now.
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The diagrams show GRANGE PARK at two different stages

 in its development: 1920 and now.

In 1920, the fountain was located the center of the park. On the right side of fountain was Pond for water plants ,which was on the top of glasshouse .on the other side of fountain ,there was Stage for musicians,  and one rose garden above and below of it respectively.

Nowadays, the center of the park was rose the bigger garden, which had four branch of seats around it. On the right side, a café children’s play area and water feature are new building insteaded the former facilities. On the left side, there were one small rose garden and Amptheratre for concerts.

At different stages, the entrance near ELDON STREET and another entrance near ARNOLD AVERUE have never changed. What’s more ,an new entrance for underground car parking occurred at the southeast corner .

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