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Some working parents believe childcare centers

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简介:Some working parents believe childcare centers can provide the best care for children, while others think other family members like grandparents can d this job. Discuss both views and give your own op ...
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Some working parents believe childcare centers can provide the best care for children, while others think other family members like grandparents can d this job. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

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There is an increasing trend that more individuals pay more attention to caring their children in the society. However, there is an argument that weather children should be sent to childcare centers or just stay at home with their grandparents. From my point of view, it is better to go to childcare centers.

 

On the one hand, a large number of people prefer asking their parents to take care of their children. Surely, there are some advantages to do like this. Firstly, most of grandparents have no work to do, thus they can spend all their time and effort in caring for the kids wholeheartedly. Besides, it is also a good way to save money from the educational fees which can be used to buy something with higher quality for children. In addition, grandparents can make some individual caring plans for their grandchild because they only need to care one or two kids. It is more aiming at childrens development.

 

On the other hand, some argue that childcare center are much better than grandparents. Most of the teachers in the childcare center received high-level education before entering the professional agencies. Therefore, they are all well-skilled and they can provide scientific and standard caring services and courses for children which grandparents cant afford. For example, they will do some exercises with the children to keep them fit and healthy. Moreover, if a child feels uncomfortable, they will realize it and send the kid to a hospital immediately. All of these are beneficial to childrens growth.

 

In my opinion, I believe childcare centers are the best choices to care for children. Caring is not just a simple job which involves a lot of things such as eating and teaching. Thus, it needs some professional people to support. In instance, children can make some friends and learn some simple knowledge of mathematics or languages.

 

In conclusion, though grandparents are willing to take care of the kids, it is better to let children receive professional care from the childcare centers.

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