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Nowadays,crimes related youngsters are considered the same

2019-10-12 10:23| 发布者: admin| 查看: 733| 评论: 0

简介:Nowadays,crimes related youngsters are considered the same as the adults and they are thought to be punished in the same way as the adults

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Nowadayscrimes related youngsters are considered the same as the adults and they are thought to be punished in the same way as the adults,to a certain extenti agree with this viewi would argue that they may be aware of their mistakes after accepting correct education. Lots of people have a very firm attitude that those who participate criminal activities like violence or rubber and have caused extremely bad effects should be strictly treated .for examplein the last two yearslots of news has covered many incident related to crime.an extreme incident that provoked public outrage happened in Japan impressed me.A Chinese overseas student named Jiangge was killed too protect roommatehowever, the offender was sentenced to life imprisonment rather than death. This result made many people feel ufair and angry. the incident has done great harm to the victims and her family. So most people think young and old people should be equal in law.

Even though those unfair incidents are considered to be not forgiven, I think government can make a measure to correctly educate those young criminal. If a young man touched on legal issues, most of which are caused by family factory. A Chinese variety show called X-change aim to reform the problem teenagers, and I used to be a great fan for it. Most dramatic personaes participant violence and theft. The most bastic reason is their family's problems. Some parents were busy with work and left children to grandparents, and some divorced all of which may be the factors that children make mistakes. So, the best to handle these tricky difficulties is to find and solve those original reasons, which may effectly reduce crime among young people.

In coclusion, we can take measure to give right guidence to children to curb youtg crime. 

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