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Nowadays ,with the development of economy

2019-10-26 11:13| 发布者: admin| 查看: 605| 评论: 0

简介:Nowadays ,with the development of economy, the government has more finance to support old building to be rebuilt ,even-though it is costly.There is a common opinion that government should spend this m ...
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   Nowadays ,with the development of economy, the government has more finance to support old building to be rebuilt ,even-though it is costly.There is a common opinion that government should spend this money on new housing and improving the road situation.At the same time, however, others believe that investigation in restoring old building should be supported .In this essay,I will review both sides of argument to find the conclusion.

   To begin with , there is no doubt that old building has recorded our city changes, which shows the wisdom and diligent of the older generation.The senior generation deserve our respect , so do the buildings.As we all know, there is a big gap of style difference between the new and the old. Therefore it is very sensible to make the old buildings into a scenery spot, which can attract amount of tourists, then make the tourist industry be more prosperous. It is not only for the economic target, but also to protect our valuable historical buildings. Making the old buildings refreshed also give people an opportunity to get closer to the local history, that can make a connection to the past.

   On the other hand, however, the rapid development of economy also bring some negative effects. For example, the leak between the poor and the rich becomes wider and wider. A lot of people being unemployed, even homeless. Thus, building more new house can help to solve this problem.

   To offer a settlement can prevent more cases from happening. Furthermore depends on the growing economy, our residents income has been elevated. That make there are more and more cars driving on the road, which means the more cars there are, the more unpredictable accidents will happen. If the government wants to deal with it, the first thing that they should do is to cope with the road development.

   To summarize, it is very clear that restoration of old buildings should be treated seriously, for more extent, protecting them is a kind of our obligation. However, sometimes the government should put more attention to improve citizens life quality.In the final essay, we can conclude that government should put the quality of city on the first class, spending more money in infrastructure, aim to improve our life.

 

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