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With the process of industrialization

2019-11-6 15:35| 发布者: admin| 查看: 779| 评论: 0

简介:With the process of industrialization, many countries have been faced with energy problems. Governments in different countries show different attitudes towards the fossil fuels. Many argue people shou ...
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 With the process of industrialization, many countries have been faced with energy problems. Governments in different countries show different attitudes towards the fossil fuels. Many argue people should keep on using fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas, because they are easy to use and cost less.  Despite some valid arguments, it is my personal believe alternative sources of energy are more beneficial than fossil fuels to the society.

 First of all, fossil fuels could result in pollution. Indeed, it is easy and cheap to use fossil fuels, but we cannot deny the possible cost for overcome the pollution problems caused by them. Furthermore, with the availability of new technology, we can reduce the cost of inventing alternative sources of energy.  And I believe the merits prevail its possible downsides, since new energy could benefit environment and economy as a whole.

 On the other hand, the shortage of fossil fuels could cause much bigger issue. When we use all fossil fuels, it will be increasingly difficult to find any replacement. As far as I am concerned, we should encourage the use of alternative sources of energy, such as wind energy, wind energy and solar energy. The public needs to be convinced the new energy will be used wisely so as not to result time and money waste, since pointless invention could burn through money (along with time) which leads to meaningless waste of both.

 In conclusion, alternative sources of energy will benefit the wellbeing of economics, society and. Individuals. It will not be easy for the governments to come up with a plan to replace the fossil fuels at one time. If the idea of encouraging alternative sources of energy well carried out, can be rather effective in development.

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