Sports become a more serious issue with the public paying

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 Sports become a more serious issue with the public paying more attention to some sports competitions. And many people think that sport is of significance to our social life. However, others declaim that they only regard sport as a leisure activity. From my perspective, firstly sports play a important role in our life, but we should concentrate on it properly, no matter in financial way or other methords.

  Most people regard sport as a high status, so they are more willing to spend money on it. For example, some individuals may make a debate with others for their favourite teams. And several famous companies will pour a large amount of investment to the potential sport stars. It's a reasonable matter for them to pursue what they like in variety of ways.

  In contrast, others think sport is only a leisure activity to kill off the time. They feel that it's a waste of time and money to pay more attention to sports, because sport is just one of methods to maintain a good mood.

  In my view, It's proper to concentrate on the sports. And professional player deserve the high salary due to their hard work. But we should take proper measures to treat sports. For example, people shouldn't be deprived of their reason if their favourite teams lose the game. And it's better for some companies to make a appropriate amount of investment to sports, in case of the failures of making end meet. We can't tolerate such serious consequence.

  Sport is important to our social life. And we should take proper measures to treat it.

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