In some countries the widespread use of internet has given people more freedom

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In some countries the widespread use of internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Internet plays an increasingly significant role in our daily lives. Thanks to the internet, people can take classes or communicate with their colleges without stepping out of their home. But in my opinion, it is not a wise choice to work or study via internet only.

It is undeniable that internet is one of the most useful assistants in people’s life. Firstly, it saves them amounts of time on the way to and from their schools or companies, the way which may be so long that is expected to upset people, especially in rush hours. Moreover, telecommuting makes it easier to manage time. For example, it is impossible for daily commuters to attend class during the weekdays. But if they take online classes, they can rewind the live afterwards in their spare time, gaining a more flexible time schedule.

However, it is also obvious that teleworking has disadvantages, which have a more direct relevance to the quality of work and study. Unable to see each other’s facial expression through internet communication methods such as emails and online messages, people may misunderstand others’ opinions, even causing the inefficiency of the work. What’s more, working or studying online requires a high self-discipline of staffs and students because, unlike in the real world, there is no supervisor on the internet. Once they loaf on the job, the work will never be finished on time.  

In conclusion, on the one hand, people cannot ignore the advantages of telecommuting in time saving and time management, but on the other hand, it may also lead to a more severe problem because of its lack of supervise.

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