The given bar chart reveals the number

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The given bar chart reveals the number of students who came from China, Japan, America and Russia applying for a European university from 2004 to 2008.

As is shown, Chinese students were the great significant applicants in four years, even though the number of it gradually decreased in this period from about 27500 to 17500. Meanwhile, American students became the majority of applicants in 2008, with the number of it exceeded almost a half of that of China. However, the number of Chinese pupils who would like to study in Europe dropped continuously.

In addition, there were not many Russians who want to be the international students in Europe comparing with other three countries, despite the number of Russia learner applying for that rose dramatically from 2004 to 2007. On the other hand, the trend of Japanese who choose to apply for a international students in Europe stably grew in five years.

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