The table illustrates the data on the underground railway

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The table illustrates the data on the underground railway systems in six cities. The data is divided into three parts.

The first part is the opening date. Almost all  cities started their underground railway systems in the 20th century except London and Los Angeles. It is shocking that London has opened the system as early as 1863. On the contrary, Los Angeles didn't open its underground railway system until 21th century in 2001. 

As for the next column, London topped the list at 394 kilometers,as well. In contrast to Kyoto and Los Angeles, which held the shortest railway among the six, with each of them at 11 and 28 kilometers. Moreover, the rest of cities contained similar lengths between 100-200 km. For the last column, it is Tokyo that had the largest number of passengers with 1927 million per year. Paris  was not far behind with 1191 million per year. There were just about 50million passengers in Kyoto and Los Angeles per year.

All in all, London started the system at the earliest time with the maximum length.

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