The Glass Castle that made me moved.

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I watched movie named The Glass Castle that made me moved.We can feel their parent's love from the details of the movie.I not only can get the power from it, but also can feel the warmth from the love.

The father impressed me deeply. He had a gloomy childhood, but he still wanted his children happy. His daughter feels she is ugly because of the scar in her tripe. He talk to his daughter that you will know how strong you are. And send a knife as a gift to protect her, when meet the monster can use it and make a voice like a wolf. It makes me moved because I can see how the father love his children.The other thing is the father not agree his daughter married to a rich man because her not love her husband . It makes me think one day when I marry my father must worry about me happy or not. When the other man to take care of me he must be to jealous and to check his weather or not have duty to take care of me .This scene made me moved because it made me think about my father.

I think most of this movie is happy.Thought the father had a shadowy childhood but he wanted to give their children a happy childhood.And the heroine's spirt makes me admired,brave, smart,considerate,and can catch her dream,and can cheer people around her up to catch their life,it also cheer me up and make me moved.

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