Nowadays, environmental protection draw people’s attention mostly

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Nowadays, environmental protection draw people’s attention mostly. some people think the main environmental problem is the loss of particularly species of plants and animals, while others believe that there are more important environmental problems. in my opinion the environmental problems are far more than loss of especially species of plants and animals.

  Air pollution contribute to damage the environment. To be specific, as the development of technology and industry, more people own their private cars. it produce amount of car fumes, which lead to greenhouse gas emissions and formed the acid rain. And these problems not only damage the environment,but also threaten our health,as more people suffer from respiratory disease.Meanwhile,over-use the non-renewable resources such as coals and fossil fuels cause a great loss of resources. For example, ShanXi is a province which possess countless a coals resources in the past. people here make a living by selling coals, as  heating and lighting have to rely on coals. However, the underground land almost empty because of unlimited digging.

   Admittedly,there are extinction of some particular species of plants and animals,such as DuDu,which seems break the chain of foods.To be specific,the wolf eat rabbit as food,but when the rabbit die out,the number of wolf wound decrease.And it will lost entertainment for people to enjoy the diverse animals and exotic plants.However,there are many ways to avoid this phenomenon.Such as create more wildlife reserves and introduce lows to protects them.

   All in all,the extinction id bad for environment,but it not the most main problems.Air pollution has already threaten human being’s health,as well as the lack of non-renewable resources.None of them could be ignorant.

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